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ReBlog: #amwriting: Too Many Characters?

While going through my weekly updates for blogs I’m following, I came across this article by Connie J. Jasperson  #amwriting: Too Many Characters? I’ll post an excerpt, but to get the full explanation, you must go to her website. She explains it much better than I could. You’re writing the first draft of your novel.  A beta reader has pointed out that you may have too many named characters to keep track of, and now you’re on a mission to whittle down your cast of thousands. But who should go and who should stay? What is the optimal number of characters for a book? Some say only four, others fifteen, but I say introduce however many characters it takes to tell the story but use common sense. Put the reader first–they must be able to keep them straight without any effort. When you introduce a named character, ask yourself if it is someone the reader should remember. Does he or she offer information the protagonist and reader must know? Some characters will give us clues to help our protagonist complete his/her quest.  Others show us something about the protagonist, give us a clue into their personality or past. Read More Here   Now, where this hit me is in considering a new project I thought of. I #amwriting a story about a Werewolf community, the thought being to have every chapter revolve around either a popular proverb or idiom, alternating each (proverb in one chapter, idiom in the next, then…

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The Barbarian versus The Nomads

Here is another excerpt from my WIP The Barbarian. In this section, the Barbarian, who is still unnamed, has just returned from scouting with his trainer. The main Shandan Nomad (Shandan is the desert they are in charge of ruling with tyrant abandon, if you will) is resting, as is his second-in-command, and the one left in charge, Shenkar, hates the boy more than the other two do. In the distance, they can see a cloud of dust, and the Nomad who has better long range vision sees the group of Wizards riding hard toward them. It’s a bit rough, as it is still 1st draft, but I’m sure you can get the gist of it. Well, have a look:   Nomads No More Shenkar saw the scouts returning at a leisurely pace after exploring the route to the east. Bolthed and Akheem left him in charge when they retired to one of the wagons for a brief respite, with orders to be called only if needed. Two days prior, a scout from the Wastes had brought them news of the annihilation of their allies, the Destined Ones. He also told of the warning relayed that the Nomads would be next. Bolthed immediately put the band on alert” “The way is clear for the next league, my Lord,” the older scout reported. “Get some rest, then prepare to go back out.” As they turned to leave, the trainer pointed to the north. “My lord, Shenkar; look.” A cloud of dust…

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#BlogBattle #53

This week, Rachael Ritchey is celebrating a whole year running the #BlogBattle! Congrats, Rachael! For the challenge this week, she has issued the following: “To celebrate, This week we will not be writing a new story for the battle. For Week 53 here is what I want from anyone and everyone who has ever battled: Choose one of your #BlogBattle stories from the past year Edit it however you would like Reblog/repost it on Tuesday, March 15th. Make sure you specify the genre and the theme word We will do our voting from the compilation of awesome stories presented! First, the obligatory: Rules: 1000 words max fictional tale (or true if you really want) PG (no more than PG-13) Content – let’s keep this family friendly! Your story must contain the word(s) from the theme and/or be centered around the theme in a way that shows it is clearly related Go for the entertainment value! State the Genre of your story at the top of your post. Post your story on Tuesday, by 11:59 PM PST Use the hashtag #BlogBattle when tweeting your story, put a link back to your #BlogBattle Short Story in the comments section of this page, and/or include a link to this page in your own blog post (it creates a “ping-back” which will alert me and our friends to your #BlogBattle post) Have fun! Read all the short stories and vote! Winners are announced the Monday following. So, I went through my few offerings, and found that I…

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News- #BlogBattle #11-Repost

Repost This is a repost from my vanished “Velah” blog. I still have no idea what happened to that blog, nor if it could have been recovered. I’m just cutting my losses and aiming to set up another one… eventually. For now, though, I am bringing this to one and all. I had written it for the #BlogBattle #11, and got some decent comments on it. Let’s hope I can get moving and pen some more tales for future #BlogBattles. So, without further ado, I bring you; Tonight in the News; By John T. M. Herres Good evening, everyone, I’m Jake Hennings, along with Allison Arbor, with tonight’s headlines. The Sakalel have invaded yet another city. Nahthens saw the giant, silver-skinned monsters yesterday as nearly one hundred warriors stormed the streets during a holiday parade. No word yet as to the number of fatalities, but the President is expected to declare a State of Emergency later this week. Reports have come in and been confirmed with footage from ATM and traffic cameras. We are unable to show any of the images, as they are too horrific. With enormous blades bared, they stormed the Plaza in the midst of the annual Chumbo Festival, cutting their way from there to the swamps. We have had some reports that local Law Enforcement Officers attempted to blockade them at the start of their campaign, but the bullets just glanced off these armored invaders. Wait a minute… This just in: The National Guard has recalled…

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#BlogBattle Week 13

This will be my third entry in the weekly #BlogBattle. Also, the third posted location. First entry prompt I responded to was “News.” I posted that story for The Velah, and the second was “horde” for which I made a scene for The Barbarian called “Wolf Battle” This week, I offer a brand-spanking new story written exclusively for the prompt “rope.” #BlogBattle 13  Rope Rules: 1000 words max fictional tale (or true if you really want) PG (no more than PG-13) Content – let’s keep this family friendly! Your story must contain the word(s) from the theme and/or be centered around the theme in a way that shows it is clearly related Go for the entertainment value! Post your story by Midnight PST Use the hashtag #BlogBattle when tweeting your story, put a link back to your #BlogBattle Short Story in the comments section of this page, and/or include a link to this page in your own blog post (it creates a “ping-back” which will alert me and our friends to your #BlogBattle post) Have fun! The theme for this week is Rope.   The Rope Look at it, just swinging there. Like it’s offering a fun time, just like children have. He had a hard time accepting the sight, as it looked so incongruous. He hiked through the National Forest, backpack loaded with provisions for a week, solitude his main destination, and had seen nothing strange. Until now. He trudged the thickest parts of the woods, where very few signs of humans…

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Aging Gracefully

Life is long, Life is hard, You never know what’s in your cards; We start out small and then we grow, And all the sudden we’re getting old. As the sun makes passes across the sky, We learn how to laugh, learn how to cry: We care about things, they fall to the side, To be replaced by others, and time goes by. We play and we learn and do many things, Some make us feel foolish, some make us kings. When youth is done and we join the Rat Race, We find that it takes a lot to save face; But mostly we survive, we roll with the flow, And move with the rest, become average Joes. Then one day it happens, we suddenly see, How we can be happy and fully carefree. For some it is sooner, others are later, And some let it pass, their fears are greater. So, let’s help each other, one day to find We’ve left all the cruelty completely behind!   (c) 2005, 2010 by John T. M. Herres excerpt from my self-published poetry book, “Life Through My Eyes; A Collection Of Poems”

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My First Guest Post Elsewhere

A New Development I have been granted the privilege of being featured on a blog not my own! Sally Cronin of Smorgasbord – Variety is the spice of life has posted my “Scenery” poem, as well as links to me around the web, and we have already gotten several favorable responses! Will this improve my visibility? Time will tell. I am hoping for a bit more exposure, and this could be the beginning of that path to getting a bigger fan base. I’m not even sure if I have a little one now. If you are here by following the link posted either there or on a re-blog elsewhere, I invite you to look around, see what else I have to offer. Head over to one of my blogs, and see there, too. I can tell you two things; First, the blog for the Velah is still very raw. I haven’t spent a lot of time on it as yet. Second, on my BarbarianWriter blog, I have tried to offer helpful links geared toward the newbie writer, and even have a section for movie reviews. So, a very big THANKS to any and all new visitors! Welcome, and I would love for you to take a moment from your busy day to see what else I have posted. Have a great day, may all the best things in life find their way to your life!   As always, #WriteOn! — John

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Scenery

Scenery The most beautiful scenery, I think of all, Is the majesty of a waterfall. A Caribbean lagoon of clear blue Would have to come in at number two. Not to be discounted, let it be said, Is a sunset filled with lavender and red. In a lake in a meadow, it’s nice to find, A reflection of a snow-capped mountain behind. So calming and peaceful, I think you’ll agree, Would be waves lapping sand fresh off the sea. On a walk through the forest, sure to be seen, Are all the colors and shades of green. Another view, seen only at night, Is a star-filled sky– what a sight! Even a desert, so barren of life, Can be a touching scene, if viewed just right. A swamp has its own beauty to share, As long as the dangers you stay aware. The rolling hills of the prairie land Can, of itself be exquisitely grand. So many sights in this world to behold, In one poem I think not all could be told. Just look around, you’re sure to find Some scenery that can blow your mind! Copyright 2010, “Life Through My Eyes; A Collection of Poems” by John T. M. Herres Images taken from various Pinterest posts by other users. I do not own the rights to the pictures.

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Facebook Post

Post by John T. M. Herres. Well, that didn’t go as planned. When I saw the option to imbed a Facebook post, I naturally clicked it to see what it would do. It gave me a code to paste into a webpage, thus this post. If you wish to know before you go, I posted an excerpt of “The Barbarian” written recently. It’s about the Wizard Able facing the despotic group known as The Chosen Ones, who have roamed the Frozen Wastes in the North much the same as the Shandan Nomads have terrorized the Shandan Desert. It depicts how the Wizard uses his Power, as well as some of the effects on him from using it. That’s what I’m hoping I’ve relayed, anyway. I would love to know what you think! Give me a comment here or there, if you please, and let me know if my attempt to entertain you has been successful. Until next time: #WRITE-ON!

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Challenge of The Velah

To see what I have posted for this story, please see my Velah blog here. Update December 18, 2015 Unfortunately, the blog on which the story had been posted has gone belly up. It’s almost funny, for I had just added scripts to the security protocols which should have prevented any piracy, or so it said. Maybe I didn’t install them correctly, I don’t know. It doesn’t matter anyway, for the blog is gone, and the best thing I can do is, as with so many other things that have gone wrong in my life, move on. I’ll post the sci-fi story here after the New Year. Stay Tuned!   A man inadvertently gets drawn into a war between two alien races. The evil Sakalel have set upon the Heskah race, determined to annihilate the peaceful beings in order to culminate their vengeance.  

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